First, lit review. It does not make any sense to write that guys X,Y,Z investigated a particular issue. The author should emphasize the main findings of those papers and clearly state how her particular paper contributes to the literature. I would recommend here to take a look on papers from scholar.google.com, using keywords “education” “returns on education”. It would help the author to see the world-wide standards.

Second, methodology problems. The analysis is purely descriptive and the conclusions are drawn out of the air. The more appropriate technique could be proper estimation of returns to education, etc. Right now, there is no way to conduct economic analysis without proper math/statistics techniques. Otherwise, it is not a scientific paper.

Third, Germany, with its free, but inefficient education system is omitted. The author occasionally uses Great Britain and England interchangeably.

A lot of additional work should be done.

best,
sasha

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